In the article “Introduction to Primary Research: Observations, Surveys, and Interviews”, the author mainly talks about how to do primary research when we write academic essays. The author divides the essay into different areas with subtitles, which makes the readers easy to focus on each part. He uses the convention of research paper which has organized quite clearly by different areas. The first is introduction part. Like a research paper, it usually is started with an introduction part that discuss the definition of topic and how the paper will be structured. The introduction part works like a graph in the essay. The author talks the definition of primary research. He uses the words like “the essay begins by providing…” to introduce the different areas that he will focus to discuss primary research. In his words, he will talks ethical considerations first, and then he will cover the four stages in primary research: planning, collecting, analyzing and writing. At last, he will talk three ways to conduct primary research: observation, interview and survey. It is straightforward to know the overall organization of the essay by reading only the introduction part. In this case, it is very clear to see that the next subtitles are all in the same sequence as the introduction part said. In each subtitle part, he also labels those important details so that they appear more obvious for readers. In order to make a clear organization in his paper, the author not only divides those sub parts into small areas, but also uses the graph to better present a clear structure. The examples he uses in his different areas are presented by paragraphs and slashed, which in turn makes them explicit and gives the readers the hint that those are not included into the main part which, to some extent, can be neglected when focusing the main point. For example, the author talks the different ways to make a question in survey. He talks about some important tips of making survey questions. To better illustrate his point, he uses straightforward examples to clarify his point. Those examples are succinct but sufficient, because they are slashed and used in an independent paragraph. The author uses bunch of directional words to make his essay more organized and well-structured. For example, when he discussed how to describe the method of research you used in writing, he utilized the hint words to tell the readers what he was going to say, like “the following is the sample..” and “the purpose of an introduction is...”. At the end of the essay, he also uses the conclusion part like every research paper does. In his conclusion part, he again uses the words like “this essay has presented an overview about...” to successfully grab the readers’ eyes to focus on his main point. In addition, he uses numbers to present his small points. Overall, the moves of this author makes the paper very organized and easy to follow by using hint words, graphs to present his idea, and subtitles to classify his points.
The other article that I choose is “Annoying Ways People Use Source” is quite different from the former one. Throughout the whole essay, it has no subtitles, no graphs, and no other methods that helps make the essay’s structure obvious. Unlike the former article that starts with an introduction part which directly discusses about the definition of the author’s main point, this essay’s author uses an analogy or an anecdote to start his essay. By doing this, readers will can it interesting and will continue reading. The author uses his daily life story to connect with academic writing successfully grab readers interests. And the important part is that the author continues uses this story to compare academic writing. By doing this, the paper will appear more coherent and hence the readers will find out why this story can better represent the academic writing. After the author has introduced the story, he talks about the academic writing by grabbing the common feature of these two area:The convention. Like you can not driving without knowing some basic rules, you still can not writing without following some rhetoric conventions. Since he has introduced convention in writing subconsciously, he formally defines the definition and gives an specific name: Annoyance. After that, he discusses plenty of examples that use writing conventions inappropriately. The purpose is to fix it in a correct way, which in turn shows the readers how to use convention in academic writing implicitly but easy to comprehend. Like the former article, this essay’s author also highlights the important points for readers.
Both articles claim their main point in their first paragraph, and use evidence and examples to support his thesis, and at last have a conclusion part to retell the main point in their essays. The different is the way they introduce their thesis and they way they present their evidence. The former one tends to focus on organization and hence can be easy to read for readers, the last one is more interesting and need to read throughout in order to comprehend the author’s point.
Yue,
ReplyDeleteI liked the way you structured your PB by discussing the moves of one article entirely before moving on to the next. For future writing, you should make a introduction that presents all the topics you will be talking about, so the reader knows what to expect. You used a lot of examples/comparisons of moves, which is good. However, elaborating more on your own observations and analyzing can help your reader better understand the point you're trying to make.